drarryberry
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Hogwarts House: Slytherin
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Post by drarryberry on Feb 2, 2014 17:42:09 GMT
So, I'm writing a fanfiction called Tease. It's my first one in Draco's point of view and Harry's supposed to be teasing/really sweet when it's just the two of them. I need help. Here's the Link to Chapter One
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Post by pigfartsstudent on Feb 3, 2014 5:23:02 GMT
Again, a huge recommendation from me would be a beta reader (a huge lifesaver trust me). I'd offer but I'm so busy right now, and I wouldn't want to leave you hanging for ages.
I think perhaps adding in small things like Harry nudging Draco with his elbow and a small smirk with a joke. Maybe a teasing line like 'Oh, I know, it's Ron that you like isn't it?' along with it (if that's the kind of teasing you want. If you mean sexual/romantic teasing then I'm sorry, I can't help you because I'm hopeless). As for being sweet, I think you have that down, maybe adding a few more moments to transition from being the arch enemies that they are canonically to Harry being sweet. Something like Harry saying 'you may think I don't care, but I do', or something like that. Even a small line transitions it and doesn't make it feel so sudden.
Anyway, I hope that helped a bit!
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